My teacher left the comments, – inconsistent verb tense, Incorporate dialogue pu

My teacher left the comments, – inconsistent verb tense, Incorporate dialogue purposefully rather than relying on summarizing what others say,  Structure into more paragraphs (indent), Spend more time in the moment, rather than summarizing what is happening.

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