Take a look at your introduction assignment for feedback on the introduction. I

Take a look at your introduction assignment for feedback on the introduction. I made sure to leave comments 🙂
For your first body paragraph, there’s lots of information and it seems to jump from idea-to-idea without much explanation.
I see the following topics discussed:
1. collaboration
2. comfort zones
3. trust
4. learn from mistakes
5. work-integrated learning
The focus of the paragraph seems to be collaboration with peers since that’s mostly what’s discussed at the end. Take out those other ideas and move them to other paragraphs