I need this personal statement to be personal. I am having difficulty writing a

I need this personal statement to be personal. I am having difficulty writing a personal statement because it continues to evolve into cover letter for a job rather than remain a personal statement for law school
I am looking for a theme that is worthy a law school application: such as advocacy or competence or diligence. You can be creative here and come up with events and examples for these themes for this personal statement.
Chose a theme and base the personal statement off of this, use the examples in the attached document and make the personal statement unique rather than something templated.
I have attached a personal statement that I have already been working on. It will give you a good idea of who I am and what I am trying to accomplish with my personal statement. Feel free to use whatever passages you think are most effective to portray me in a favourable light for an application.
My issue with my personal statement is that I feel it is not personal so the attached document is the complete opposite that I am trying to achieve. I need it to be a creative and expressive rather than formal.
Please let me know, feel free to communicate with me