I have attached 2 files. One is my draft and the other is a small student sample

I have attached 2 files. One is my draft and the other is a small student sample that my professor has given us. In my draft for my historical introduction, my professor asked for me to make sure that this is the only paragraph that is past tense, the rest must be present tense.
Throughout my essay she wants correct documentation, I’m assuming similar to her sample. For the literary elements like personification in my sentences, my professor wants explanations to their meanings and how it is being used and also which line it can be found in. You can rewrite the whole paper for all I care, I just need for this paper to be pretty much formatted correctly to my professor’s standards. Please do not forget to add the citations into the sentences and if you find any other websites or articles to add them in the work cited section. Please make it as similar to her sample if possible at least just for the historical intro.