Please refer to screenshots and notes from the rough draft of the essay. Please

Please refer to screenshots and notes from the rough draft of the essay. Please revise the essay accordingly. Screenshots of the rough draft will be provided, revision notes will be provided below, a pdf of the essay will be provided, and sources used in the essay will also be provided. Complete the revision and send back the completed essay.
REVISION NOTES: Overall, I need to see some discussions of different methods of family history and your opinion on them. Family trees? Oral history? DNA testing? I think clarifying what you want to focus on will help you argue beyond the importance of including individuals into our understanding of history. – Family history also has a long history, right? Clarify what you mean by conventional history. Are you talking about inclusion of family history into “conventional history” (i.e., used as academic source or museum exhibits, etc.?) – I want to see a more detailed engagement with the academic article. What is your take on genetic ancestry, which is the main topic of the article? – Your paragraphs tend to be short. Consider combining them.
Source: https://www.nytimes.com/2018/11/19/magazine/dna-te…
Source: Mark D. Shriver and Rick A. Kittles, ‘Genetic Ancestry and the Search for Personalized Genetic Histories’, Nature Reviews Genetics 5 (2004), pp. 611-618.
Source: “Looking for your roots? For Asians, blacks and Latinos, DNA tests don’t tell whole story.” USA Today, Dec 2, 2018.