I need help boosting my scholarship generalist form response What I have come up

I need help boosting my scholarship generalist form response What I have come up with is provided in the attachments
My feild of study is industrial management with a
Specialization in supply chain/logistics my prior studies where both Technical now I am seeking to climb the vertical success ladder at work to become salaried and help others. All my studies and experiences tie together to be being knowledgeable about the cans and cant’s of the operations process