this is my presentation ( powerpoint) for my work but my manager give me feedbac

this is my presentation ( powerpoint) for my work but my manager give me feedback i have to do it
can you help me and do it for me
I have reviewed the documents, kindly find my feedback below:
For the performance management document, I only added a curve for % distribution.
For the objectives document you need to elaborate more on the following point How the cascade process work?
The accountability and tracking of timelines.
Review process
For the succession process document, you need to identify the stages of successions in order Assess the leadership demand ( Critical Roles)
Identify succession candidates (internal , external)
Asssess the candidates ( any assessment tool like enterviews or tests and needs to be supported by documentations)
Propose candidates for succession to a review committee (should be a sub-committee connected to the Board such as NRC)
Prepare succesors to meet role requirements ( development plan)On the job learning Ex: (rotation ,stretch assignments ..etc.)
Coaching Ex:( providing mentors , working with external coach..etc)
Formal learning Ex: (participating in leadership development programs ,obtaing specific certificates..etc.)
Finally develop a retention program