I need help with my 12000 word dissertation, what I need now is the corrections

I need help with my 12000 word dissertation, what I need now is the corrections for chapter 1-3 and then continue chapter 4-7 comprising of 7500 word.
I’m inviting the same tutor that started this work for the continuation. And will still invite same tutor for others regarding the dissertation until it’s completion.
The details of the Dissertation has been attached below.
The corrections to be done in 1-3 are in the comment section of the document.
Please go through the proposal and the work before proceding with chapter 4.
The referencing style is Havard and there should be an additional 75 references for these chapters.
I want an excellent work and will also need the details for my ethical clearance. Please go through the attachments before beginning.