My teacher gave feedback, and there were some things I missed. Many comments are

My teacher gave feedback, and there were some things I missed. Many comments are the same about not analyzing and being redundant. I copied the comments on the document (linked below). Please read through all of them. I don’t need it until tomorrow morning. That way I can just read through it.
Assignment: Purpose: Your purpose in writing this essay is to demonstrate your understanding of the author’s key points. Analyze the effectiveness of an argument by applying the tools for analysis learned so far this semester. For this paper, you are not agreeing or disagreeing with an author’s ideas. Assume each argument has value, and analyze the limits, the conditions, the purpose. Avoid using the appeals as concepts in your writing (do not talk about “pathos” in the example, for instance). If you understand the concept of pathos, you know it is not “emotion” but a particular way an author has of creating a an emotional response. You analyze how they create that response in their use of language. You want to demonstrate why and how it is effective, and the limits of the argument. Remember there are no absolutes in analysis. You analyze conditions in order to let your own audience to make the final decision on the example’s effectiveness.
Audience: Write your essay from an objective position (without any reference to “I” or “we”). Use language appropriate for your instructor and classmates, that is, for an academic audience. You should focus on the analysis rather than on how you think an audience would respond. For this reason, you should not address the audience as “you” or “us.”
Although your audience will have read the argument you are analyzing, you should still begin your essay with a brief summary of key points you will address. Notice, you will have to make choices about what to focus on based on importance. You cannot deal with every detail in a long argument. You must evaluate the whole, look for the main points, judge for yourself the importance of key issues, and organize your analysis based on those choices. A good analysis makes the specific context immediately clear, and avoids generalizing at the start. Academic papers do not spend time talking about the history of an issue, or how all the world relates to a concern. They focuses immediately on the argument made by a specific author.
Describe the rhetorical situation in the argument (author, title, context, intended audience, and original place and date of publication) before examining the text. Briefly summarize the key concerns and points to set up the context for your analysis. Demonstrate critical thinking by seeing the author’s argument as a strategy, a structure and development, with a specific aim in mind. Note how the author uses introductions, ideas, examples, attitudes, and rhetorical techniques (ethos, pathos, logos, audience awareness, style, voice, etc.). Maintain a clear focus and logical development in your essay. Avoid distracting spelling and grammatical errors so that your analysis is credible.
Ask Critical Questions of the Argument you will analyze: When writing a rhetorical analysis, examine the choices a writer has made in constructing their argument. Those choices deal with content, setting, style, tone, logic, evidence, etc. Analyze those choices as intentional on the author’s part. Ask yourself some of the following questions to deepen your points in the analysis:
Discuss whether or not the writer uses emotions (pathos) responsibly and effectively.
Do they use emotions in a way that is satisfying, but not manipulative?
Are the emotions genuine?
Do they appeal to our emotions by connecting to the values of their target audience?
Discuss the author’s credibility (ethos) and how this adds to or detracts from his/her argument.
What makes this author credible or not?
Is the writer informed, trustworthy? Why or why not?
How would you describe the writer’s tone?
How does the writer’s credibility enhance or damage his/her argument?
Discuss the author’s use of logic (logos).
Do they appeal to your sense of reason? What is the reasoning?
How well do they support their arguments with careful explanations?
What kind of evidence is used? Does the evidence appeal to your logic, or does it fall short?
Discuss the writer’s awareness of audience.
What assumptions does the writer make about his/her readers?
Does the writer respect their readers, or is the writer arrogant toward them?
Does the writer use reasons and evidence that will appeal to their target audience?
Discuss the writer’s stylistic choices.
Formal versus informal
Use of humor to convince versus seriousness
Repetitions, patterns in the language, approach
Tone – Humble and self-critical, or arrogant and all knowing? Funny, smart, relatable?
In a short paper such as this, you cannot address all the above questions. You should select two or three critical questions or prompts that relate best to the argument you are analyzing (or, construct your own prompts that address the writer’s rhetorical strategies). Choose points that you can fully discuss and effectively support in your paper.
Paper: Rhetorical Analysis Essay^J RRaber.docx
Article: https://everydayfeminism.com/2014/12/animal-rights…
Here is the link to my paper and the article that is used for this analysis. Please do not do revisions on the same Word document. Make a new one so I can compare if that’s okay.
Thank you!!