Hello Jana, I went to grade your paper and almost 1/2 of your paper (1100 words)

Hello Jana,
I went to grade your paper and almost 1/2 of your paper (1100 words) are direct quotes. I had mentioned when I reviewed your draft. This will bring your grade down. If you would like to take another few days and revise it, please let me know. If not, I will grade it as is. Please let me know which way you would like to go. Here is the information that was included in the course overview (Slide 15).
´Over quoting must be avoided – general rule is to only quote information that you fear will lose meaning if stated any differently
´Direct quotes should always be used sparingly.
(I have attached the original paper I did.)
ORIGINAL INSTRUCTIONS:
Write a 2250-word expository essay directed at Christian business persons on one of the Biblically-based topics/ principles listed below. The essay is to describe three concepts relating to the topic you have chosen and show your knowledge and insight of scripture as it relates to each of the three concepts. Please make this a final polished professional-looking document using APA format.
– Compensation principles (salary and wages)
– Training and Development
– Recruiting and selection of effective employees
– Succession Planning
– Conflict Resolution
Personal experience is acceptable to support your points but be sure to explain to the reader carefully how your experiences apply. You would still need to use academic references to support your views.
For insight into what an expository essay is please see: http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/685/02/ but do not follow the five-paragraph method described on the website. You will have five sections — introduction of your topic, the three concepts, and a conclusion. Your introduction should briefly discuss your main topic and identify the three subtopics you will talk about in the paper.
Note that this project is scored using the Minor Project Rubric (not QEP). Please click on the underlined ‘Minor Project 2’ heading above and review the rubric so that you know how the project will be scored.
Decide how much text you can include in each of the sections and subsections and then write up to that word count. Do not write all that you can and then attempt to pare all of it down to 2250 words.