Hi, You created an outline for an essay. My teacher provided feedback on that,

Hi,
You created an outline for an essay. My teacher provided feedback on that, as well as your introduction, and I uploaded both by writing the feedback. Please work on it based on the feedback. It is very important to work according to feedback.
Instructions
Purpose
The purpose of this assignment is to further develop your critical thinking, research, and writing skills in an extended essay format. This research essay requires you to use 4-6 reliable sources to substantiate a claim on a chosen topic. The essay should include a clear introduction with a thesis statement, well-developed paragraphs to show that other views have been considered, and an unambiguous conclusion.
Task
You have participated in the writing process by completing the following steps to construct a multi-paragraph, seven to eight-page essay.
Return to your research question and if necessary, revise it as you continue the research and exploration process.
Develop a thesis statement and a formal outline.
Engage in an analysis of another student’s outline and highlight positive aspects of their research sources, thesis statement, and organization of their work and then provide constructive feedback and suggestions on what can be improved or changed.
You are now tasked with writing the final draft of an edited and proofread multi-paragraph, 7 – 8-page, research essay. The final draft should show improvement from earlier drafts and demonstrate that you have incorporated feedback from your instructor and peers.
Your essay must include and fully integrate information from 4-6 research sources only and adhere to standard APA conventions and rules for accurate English writing mechanics, style, and formatting. You must cite the sources of all ideas, facts, and information used that are not your own, even if you have put the information into your own words. Failure to do so is plagiarism, even if the oversight is unintentional.