This personal statement was done but however it needs a few ammendments which th

This personal statement was done but however it needs a few ammendments which the previous writer was failing to do and I have now done a new order to edit this!
This must be cut down too 1000 words only it’s gone over!
It still needs cutting down- section 1 is 656 words. Section 2 needs to focus on key stage 3,4 an 5 PE rather than teaching more generally and include specific examples of what you have done and the skills you need to demonstrate.