I have already added some work done on the paper. I’m attaching what I have star

I have already added some work done on the paper. I’m attaching what I have started if you would go over it and play off of that. I have also included what the initial outline for the paper was.
There are some things I made note of that I would possibly like mentioned in the paper:
-work in how the US is considerably less successful in its correctional mission than the European countries we are looking at.
-in addition to recidivism rates, pointing out that Norway, Netherlands, and Germany also have lower crime rates and lower incarceration rates.
-can mention how drug related offenses contribute a lot to our mass incarceration issue
-how the united states handles fines in comparison to Norway, Netherlands, and Germany
-in relation to mass incarceration, can talk about how private prisons benefit from having people in jail. This leads to corruption within the system (ex: Judge Mark Ciavarella who was convicted for receiving payments for giving people worse sentences [https://archives.fbi.gov/archives/philadelphia/press-releases/2011/former-pennsylvania-county-president-judge-and-juvenile-judge-mark-ciavarella-sentenced-to-28-years-in-prison])
The paper requirements are as follows:
You are federal judge who has been chosen by the Vera Institute of Justice to analyze European corrections and sentencing policies and practices with the purpose of recommending changes to the U.S. Sentencing Commission to address America’s problem of mass incarceration. You will use the Vera Institute of Justice report “Sentencing in Germany and Netherlands,” and Michael Moore’s 8 ½ minute documentary on Bastoy Island off the coast of Norway (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=01mTKDaKa6Q) to write a five-page paper that compares and contrasts the corrections and sentencing practices of the United States, Germany, Norway, and the Netherlands. You may also use outside sources
Based on outcome measures such as violent crime rates, incarceration and recidivism rates, what recommendations would you make to the U.S. Sentencing Commission to address the problem of mass incarceration in America?
Format of Paper:
Paragraphs 1-2 (less than a page): Introduce yourself as a US judge and state why you are writing your proposal/ recommendations and the materials you have used to arrive at your conclusions. Include a thesis statement.
Paragraphs 3-7 (2 pages): Compare 3-4 major differences between US corrections and sentencing practices and those in Germany, Netherlands, and Norway using your references and the documentary.
Paragraphs 7-11 (2 pages): Describe the violent crime rates, incarceration and recidivism rates in the US versus Germany, the Netherlands, and Norway. In the final paragraphs, give your recommendations to the US Sentencing Commission about how to address the problem of mass incarceration in America.
Include a references page of works cited and use APA in-text citation.